We’re a party of four shivering on a crowded Seattle sidewalk, each of us clutching a phone. Stuart is texting a client. Donnie, Stuart’s son, holds a defunct flip-phone close to his ear, flipping it open and closed. Click. Clack. Click. Clack. My son Tyler is scrolling Instagram.
Oh wow! I must admit, as soon as the narrator started question Stuart's motives, I immediately went back to re-read the whole 'splash' scene and I just can't make up my mind... The phone and the jacket... stepping in front of the other boy... but he loves Donnie... This is absolutely awesome - super dark, but super awesome!
I have a relative with a developmental disability. He’s an adult now and doing quite well. Very sweet actually, but his childhood was rough. I got to imagining what could happen with the wrong parent.
Oh wow! I must admit, as soon as the narrator started question Stuart's motives, I immediately went back to re-read the whole 'splash' scene and I just can't make up my mind... The phone and the jacket... stepping in front of the other boy... but he loves Donnie... This is absolutely awesome - super dark, but super awesome!
So glad you liked it!
Wow, this is well-written— and dark!!
Thanks!
So well written! So dark. I am the stepmother of a troubled girl who developed schizophrenia. Gods, you so nailed the emotions!
I have a relative with a developmental disability. He’s an adult now and doing quite well. Very sweet actually, but his childhood was rough. I got to imagining what could happen with the wrong parent.
This is so good. Shockingly good!
Thank you so much!
Turn it into a novel
Great stuff, TJ! I love how eloquently you showed everyone's internal lives in so few words. And dark, haha!
😲 TJ!! You knocked it out of the park, again! Wow!
Oooooo, that was dark! Well written, too! I wonder who's next? Mahahaha
I like to think those two won’t have more children, but who knows what they might do next?
Thanks for reading!
Wow... loved it. Did he really do it for her or is it just my sick imagination?! Anyway. Loved it. Thank you!🩶
I suspect he did it for his own selfish reasons, sick bastard. Thanks for reading!